This is for English, keep in mind I'm not done. I got poor feedback on my other other song."taking my life isn't appropriate for school" It'll be appropriate when I'm dead. Anyways, how is this one so far, and what should I change?
Answer: I think the song is really good, but saying ‘girl’ makes it sound kind of tacky. You could take it out or replace it with something like a one syllable name.
