After reading the first 12 chapters of THE BELL JAR, I have to write a friendly letter to Esther giving her advice and support. I have to include quotes from the book and this is what I have so far. can I get some feedback?

Answer:
This is good but I personally don't recommend you to write prepositions at the first sentence.
Explanation:
In my opinion, putting prepositions at the first sentence aren't so proper.